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Post by Bronski on Nov 26, 2013 20:39:03 GMT -8
I have no idea why, but I wrote a fragment of a PokéSpe HS fic, tell me if you like it. The bell rang as Yellow sprinted for the classroom. It's just the first day of school and she's already late. 'If only Crystal had come sooner, Gold wouldn't have hel me up so long!' She was approaching an intersection with the classroom straight ahead, however, she ran into someone who appeared from around the corner. She got up and ran over to him. "I'm sorry, I was running late and-" She paused when she had a good look at him. He was wearing a red cap over his black hair, which stood out from their uniform. His eyes were red, and were full of spirit... This is a very short passage so there's not much to comment. I'm confused about one thing; how she knew Gold & Crystal but not Red. Overall, it's nice and simple. |
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Post by Thanos on Nov 26, 2013 20:59:34 GMT -8
I have no idea why, but I wrote a fragment of a PokéSpe HS fic, tell me if you like it. The bell rang as Yellow sprinted for the classroom. It's just the first day of school and she's already late. 'If only Crystal had come sooner, Gold wouldn't have hel me up so long!' She was approaching an intersection with the classroom straight ahead, however, she ran into someone who appeared from around the corner. She got up and ran over to him. "I'm sorry, I was running late and-" She paused when she had a good look at him. He was wearing a red cap over his black hair, which stood out from their uniform. His eyes were red, and were full of spirit... Lovely, absolutely lovely!  |
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Post by V on Nov 26, 2013 23:30:24 GMT -8
I have no idea why, but I wrote a fragment of a PokéSpe HS fic, tell me if you like it. The bell rang as Yellow sprinted for the classroom. It's just the first day of school and she's already late. 'If only Crystal had come sooner, Gold wouldn't have hel me up so long!' She was approaching an intersection with the classroom straight ahead, however, she ran into someone who appeared from around the corner. She got up and ran over to him. "I'm sorry, I was running late and-" She paused when she had a good look at him. He was wearing a red cap over his black hair, which stood out from their uniform. His eyes were red, and were full of spirit... This is a very short passage so there's not much to comment. I'm confused about one thing; how she knew Gold & Crystal but not Red. Overall, it's nice and simple. Remember, it's a fragment. For all we know, they could have been introduced just moments before. |
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Post by It's Sky on Nov 28, 2013 6:56:35 GMT -8
It isn't one we've thought of much, but what about the Orange Island leaders? Should they play a role?
Also, I'm working on an expanded list for the beginning to include E4, Champions, and possibly Frontier Brains.
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Post by Bronski on Nov 28, 2013 7:18:14 GMT -8
It isn't one we've thought of much, but what about the Orange Island leaders? Should they play a role? Also, I'm working on an expanded list for the beginning to include E4, Champions, and possibly Frontier Brains. Anabel should be counselor because she's an empath. |
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Post by It's Sky on Feb 23, 2014 14:06:22 GMT -8
Oh man, I found this and remembered the story I'd started to write for it. Any point in continuing?
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